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Life is a road full of potholes-
Love is a mountain that's steep.
I try and I try to remember,
What do I fear in sleep?
These hands that try to hold me
Are rough and wet with sweat.
What is this tangible feeling?
Is it something I'll forget?
A bluebird, a blackbird- It has it's nest
With a lover waiting so true.
Do I have a place where I can rest,
Someone to run back to?
I'm dreaming of sun, so warm- so bright!
I see a moon in a diamond sky.
I turn and find a face so close
A word on his lip, a smile in his eye.
Now I remember why I hate to dream-
I'm afraid to awake, to be alone.
Yet how can I fear when he's holding my hand?
To see in his eyes, my home.
Love is a mountain that's steep.
I try and I try to remember,
What do I fear in sleep?
These hands that try to hold me
Are rough and wet with sweat.
What is this tangible feeling?
Is it something I'll forget?
A bluebird, a blackbird- It has it's nest
With a lover waiting so true.
Do I have a place where I can rest,
Someone to run back to?
I'm dreaming of sun, so warm- so bright!
I see a moon in a diamond sky.
I turn and find a face so close
A word on his lip, a smile in his eye.
Now I remember why I hate to dream-
I'm afraid to awake, to be alone.
Yet how can I fear when he's holding my hand?
To see in his eyes, my home.
A home, to me, is where you can be yourself. Where you can feel safe and comfortable. There's a saying that goes, "Home is where the heart is". Well, I believe that saying is true. And I've found that when I'm with him... I'm happy. I could be in a trailer, I could be in a mansion- I could even be in a pig sty. But if he was there, I would be home.
To be honest, I have security issues. I believe that he'll leave me, that I'll be alone. I guess this poem really says it all- So, if you read it, you'll understand better.
But when I look in his eyes, I'm home.
I wrote this for the group #writeaway -
They are having a contest called
"Home Sweet Home".
[link]
If I forget something, or I need to do something else to qualify please let me know. =]
To be honest, I have security issues. I believe that he'll leave me, that I'll be alone. I guess this poem really says it all- So, if you read it, you'll understand better.
But when I look in his eyes, I'm home.
I wrote this for the group #writeaway -
They are having a contest called
"Home Sweet Home".
[link]
If I forget something, or I need to do something else to qualify please let me know. =]
© 2012 - 2024 LassieBob
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Co-founder of #writeaway here! I'm making my way round and giving some feedback on the entries. Once again, thank you very much for entering.
The rhyming scheme is pleasant. When making my way through poetry on here, I often find that rhyming schemes feel forced and bogs the poem down but with this poem, it works very well.
The third stanza is my favourite as the image of a bird leaving the nest is very apt, and the hint of romance was very interesting. But in the third stanza, there is a small typo. The "it's" should be "its" but other than that, I don't think I see any other mistakes.
I feel that there are too many rhetorical questions but that's just personal preference. Aside from the small typo, this is well written and flows nicely.
The rhyming scheme is pleasant. When making my way through poetry on here, I often find that rhyming schemes feel forced and bogs the poem down but with this poem, it works very well.
The third stanza is my favourite as the image of a bird leaving the nest is very apt, and the hint of romance was very interesting. But in the third stanza, there is a small typo. The "it's" should be "its" but other than that, I don't think I see any other mistakes.
I feel that there are too many rhetorical questions but that's just personal preference. Aside from the small typo, this is well written and flows nicely.