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Dreams falling from my hand
Like small golden grains of sand.
I watch them, sparkle and shine,
Knowing they will never be mine.

They're stolen, one by one
Shot far from me by a gun.
One was plucked apart by love,
Another kidnapped by a dove.

Hate is sharp and tears them-
Pain's strength has crushed them.
I just watch them all,
In their golden waterfall.
Just a poem I wrote at midnight last night...
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Kankerblossom13 Featured By Owner Oct 11, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Gorgeous!
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LassieBob Featured By Owner Oct 11, 2012  Student Photographer
Thanks :)
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Miss-blyss Featured By Owner Feb 18, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
this is absolutely wonderful... <3 never stop writing
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LassieBob Featured By Owner Feb 20, 2012  Student Photographer
I hope I won't =]
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RollingFrog Featured By Owner Feb 14, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
This has to be a personal favorite of mine!

I'm a poet myself and I just love how you kept the subject pure and yet placed it in words so easy to understand. I have trouble with this myself, keeping the concept in the reader's reach while painting a deep and meaningful picture as well. I also find it intriguing that you wrote this at midnight. I find from my own experience that some of the best poetry can simply slip out of nowhere, without preparation or thought.

Please keep on writing!
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LassieBob Featured By Owner Feb 14, 2012  Student Photographer
Thank you so much... That means so much to me! Much of my poetry comes to me late at night, thus I have to force myself to grope for a pencil in the dark and scribble them down. I'm glad you like it, and I hope you check some more of my work out =]
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RollingFrog Featured By Owner Feb 14, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I certainly will:D!

I opened a new group recently called ThePenMastersLounge and if you're interested we'd love to have you. It's not much of a group, in fact you'd be the first member to join, but I'm hopeful it will grow. There will always be a seat at the table for you if you want it:), but of course you don't have to part of a group for poeple to see you are a real PenMaster.

Keep on rolling on!
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LassieBob Featured By Owner Feb 15, 2012  Student Photographer
Thank you =]

I will definitely think about it, and tell some of my friends about it!
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SakuraJBlossom Featured By Owner Feb 12, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
You did a great job using end rhyme and meter to evoke the tone of the piece. I am impressed with the emotion you've managed to put into the three four line stanzas.
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LassieBob Featured By Owner Feb 12, 2012  Student Photographer
I tried to put as much feeling into my poetry as possible... I'm glad it's showing through =]
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