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Insecurity,
Please- Don't leave me, please.
I can't seem to breathe,
Unless you're here with me.
I know you say you're there,
But do you really care?
Is that love on your face,
Am I truly safe?

Insecurity,
You got a hold on me.
I'm down on one knee,
Please listen to this plea!
You see, you hold my heart,
And that's only the start.
Not even the worst part-
Am I truly safe?
Popped in my head randomly...
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MFPalmer Featured By Owner May 7, 2013
damn kool
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LassieBob Featured By Owner May 7, 2013  Student Photographer
:)
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NitzanHavoc Featured By Owner Feb 17, 2012
Again, just my humble opinion, but the word "insecurity" in the beginning of each line feels a bit redundant, like you're spoon-feeding us :) The poem SCREAMS "insecurity" and suits the title beautifully, I feel insecure just reading it. Indeed well written :)
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LassieBob Featured By Owner Feb 17, 2012  Student Photographer
Unlike most of my other scribbles, this isn't just a poem. It is a song, and the tune is pounding in my head... This is more like two verses, or maybe two different choruses? So the repetition is definitely because of the rhythm to the song in my head...
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NitzanHavoc Featured By Owner Feb 17, 2012
Oh! My bad then... why not post it under "songs and lyrics" then? You might even find a composer!
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DiabloDoom Featured By Owner Feb 11, 2012
well written !
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LassieBob Featured By Owner Feb 11, 2012  Student Photographer
Thank you =]
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