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The Spark

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As I looked up from my spot on the couch I noticed that he was watching me. He caught my eye, and smiled from the kitchen table. I felt myself blush and look away. Waiting was something I had always hated in my past, but with him it was effortless. I knew he was worth it.

I turned back to my book as the steady sound of his pencil against the paper resumed. While I let my eyes scan the page in front of me I realized I couldn't focus. All my body was on alert, but it wasn't because of the story in front of me- it was the story that could be.

Shutting my book I leaned back against the cushion and closed my eyes. Instantly I saw him, smirking, frowning, laughing,  and just being completely... Perfect. Without realizing it I sighed, putting all my longing into one audible breath. I wondered if he noticed and strained to hear him, but my own breathing was the only sound in the room.


Disappointed that he had left without saying goodbye, I finally opened my eyes.


I turned to get my bag when I noticed it wasn't on the couch next to me. In its place was him, in all his perfectness. Feeling the shock on my face I blushed for what had to have been the twentieth time that day and ducked my head.

Hesitantly he reached out, and gently took my hair in his fingers. He slowly tucked the stray pieces behind my ear. His brown eyes were sparkling with some deep held emotion.  Looking into them, I felt my heart speed up and willed myself not to blush. I saw something very similar to hope in his face, and yet there was a certain kind of sadness in him.

Quietly, with his beautiful eyes staring holes into me, he said "You have a very nice face you know. It shouldn't be hidden behind anything, even something as pretty as your hair."

I could feel the heat on my cheeks, and felt like this moment could last forever.  Suddenly I was more sure of the spark than I had ever been. There was something in him that I wanted, and in this moment I realized it wanted me too.
I've decided to start writing, instead of being left alone with my thoughts... I hope someone enjoys :)
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NotenSMSK's avatar
This is really beautiful! I loved the whole read, it was so mesmerizing and so sweet. While I don't like romantic stuff, this was different since it held the innocent emotions of a person who longs for another and wishes that they know as well yet are unable to elucidate it properly. Very sweet and touching, and for a change a happy work that I have read in a long time. I usually get the sad ones my way :giggle:

There were a few uncertain moments... I wondered if he noticed and strained to hear him..." I didn't get the strained to hear him... it should be himself or something.

Also, when you were disappointed that he had left, there should be some hint that he gave away that he was leaving. It is like... you closed your eyes and thought he was gone. That felt a bit strange.

...the stray pieces behind my ears... wouldn't it sound better as "locks" perhaps? I mean that is a universal word ^^

Over all a beautiful read!